Please give your opinion, give me some feedback. PLEASE!!!?

Aww...nice effort but that love letter was entirely too long. A girl will get bored and even a little creeped out when a guy pours out all of his emotions especially onto a piece of paper. A love letter to a girl is literally about you expressing your LOVE for her. Most men write about how much they are in love with their mate , they don't give them a play by play about everything they've done together in the past. A love letter also doesn't have to be a letter it can also be a sweet poem while secretly hinting how you feel about her. I say rewrite it and instead turn it into a poem. I read how you talked about her eyes , you could say something like [your eyes are so beautiful they look like they were made from the man in the sky. lol.] You may think that verse sucks but you get my drift right? The poem is good and I'm sure you put alot of time into it but just think about what I said If you want. =] Good luck.